Editing Project

20 Sidelines Corrections

1. Incorrect: Since both of the groups were going to perform at Waxface, Reddick decided to turn the live show into a party. Not only a show with great music, but also an opportunity to network and add to their portfolio

Correct: Since both of the groups were going to perform at Waxface, Reddick decided to turn the live show into a party. He intended it to not only be a show with great music, but also an opportunity to network and add to their portfolio.

http://mtsusidelines.com/2018/03/waxface-records-provides-music-networking-at-70s-themed-party/ 

2. Incorrect: The pair came up with their business idea after seeing kombucha sales  rising in the stores.

Correct: The pair came up with their business idea after seeing Kombucha sales  rising in the stores.

http://mtsusidelines.com/2018/03/waxface-records-provides-music-networking-at-70s-themed-party/

3. Incorrect: “The Herd weren’t done posting up runs on the scoreboard in the sixth inning, however.”

Correct:However, The Herd wasn’t done posting up runs on the scoreboard in the sixth inning.”

http://mtsusidelines.com/2018/04/baseball-marshall-completes-sweep-of-mt-with-9-4-victory/

4. Incorrect: Minutes after, Blackbear took the stage with his band that was comprised of a drummer, a bass player who doubled as a keyboardist and a sound engineer.

Correct: Minutes after, Blackbear took the stage with his band that was comprised of a drummer and a bass player who doubled as a keyboardist and a sound engineer.

http://mtsusidelines.com/2018/04/rappers-lil-yachty-blackbear-blow-the-roof-off-murphy-center-for-mtsu-spring-concert/

5. Incorrect: He—like Blackbear—also performed songs from his earlier projects as well as his most recent one, “Lil Boat 2.”

Correct: He, like Blackbear, also performed songs from his earlier projects as well as his most recent one, “Lil Boat 2.”

http://mtsusidelines.com/2018/04/rappers-lil-yachty-blackbear-blow-the-roof-off-murphy-center-for-mtsu-spring-concert/

6. Incorrect: Yachty’s set ended up being the highlight of the night as not only did the crowd rock with him, but they also formed a mosh-pit on the floor when he requested.

Correct: Yachty’s set ended up being the highlight of the night as not only did the crowd rock with him, but they also formed a mosh pit on the floor when he requested.

http://mtsusidelines.com/2018/04/rappers-lil-yachty-blackbear-blow-the-roof-off-murphy-center-for-mtsu-spring-concert/

7. Incorrect: Pennsylvanian rock band Breaking Benjamin has followed 2015’s Billboard 200 topping project “Darkest Before Dawn” with their sixth studio album “Ember.”

Correct: Pennsylvanian rock band Breaking Benjamin has followed up 2015’s Billboard 200 topping project “Darkest Before Dawn” with their sixth studio album “Ember.”

http://mtsusidelines.com/2018/04/breaking-benjamin-picks-up-where-they-left-off-in-ember/

8. Incorrect: To revive the forgotten newspaper tradition, MTSU Freshman Jake Stone will be drawing a bi-weekly cartoon for mtsusidelines.com which will also run monthly in Sidelines news magazine.

Correct: To revive the forgotten newspaper tradition, MTSU Freshman Jake Stone will be drawing a bi-weekly cartoon for mtsusidelines.com, which will also run monthly in Sidelines news magazine.

http://mtsusidelines.com/2017/01/hey-kid-cartoon-by-jake-stone/

9. Incorrect: During one of the intermissions that allowed for the models to change outfits, The DJ kept the fun going and played “Wobble,” which got the entire audience on their feet while waiting for the fashion show to resume.

Correct: During one of the intermissions that allowed for the models to change outfits, the DJ kept the fun going and played “Wobble,” which got the entire audience on their feet while waiting for the fashion show to resume.

http://mtsusidelines.com/2018/04/the-first-annual-natural-hair-fashion-show-educates-empowers-its-audience/

10. Incorrect: The diverse sonic palate isn’t just for aesthetic reasons, however, as it contributes to the overall meaning of songs such as “Not Abel,” which at its opening exhibits a classical style rife with harp plucks and a vocal delivery reminiscent of Joanna Newsom’s elegant style.

Correct: The diverse sonic palate isn’t just for aesthetic reasons. It also contributes to the overall meaning of songs such as “Not Abel,” which at its opening exhibits a classical style rife with harp plucks and a vocal delivery reminiscent of Joanna Newsom’s elegant style.

http://mtsusidelines.com/2018/04/hop-alongs-bark-your-head-off-dog-is-a-profound-indie-rock-treasure/

11. Incorrect: He was not alone in this point of view as dancehall legend Sean Paul also opined that Drake, Justin Bieber and Major Lazer were guilty of taking elements of dancehall culture and not shining a light on the culture itself.

Correct: He was not alone in this point of view as dancehall legend, Sean Paul, also opined that Drake, Justin Bieber and Major Lazer were guilty of taking elements of dancehall culture and not shining a light on the culture itself.

http://mtsusidelines.com/2018/03/opinion-bruno-mars-and-the-issue-of-cultural-appropriation-in-pop-music/

12. In the music industry today it is often difficult to separate the music from the artist.

Correct: In the music industry today, it is often difficult to separate the music from the artist.

http://mtsusidelines.com/2018/03/opinion-bruno-mars-and-the-issue-of-cultural-appropriation-in-pop-music/

13. Incorrect: Twigs is of mixed race descent—her father is Jamaican and her mother is an English woman of Spanish ancestry.

Correct: Twigs is of mixed race descent, her father is Jamaican and her mother is an English woman of Spanish ancestry.

http://mtsusidelines.com/2018/03/opinion-bruno-mars-and-the-issue-of-cultural-appropriation-in-pop-music/

14. Incorrect: I do not believe that Bruno Mars is a cultural appropriator, a quick dive into his music catalog will reveal nothing short of an incredibly talented, original pop artist.

Correct: I do not believe that Bruno Mars is a cultural appropriator, because one quick dive into his music catalog will reveal nothing short of an incredibly talented, original pop artist.

http://mtsusidelines.com/2018/03/opinion-bruno-mars-and-the-issue-of-cultural-appropriation-in-pop-music/

15. Incorrect: Not to mention Mars has stated on multiple occasions that growing up he was heavily influenced by a lot of the artists he’s accused of appropriating.

Correct: Moreover, Mars has stated on multiple occasions that growing up he was heavily influenced by a lot of the artists he’s accused of appropriating.

http://mtsusidelines.com/2018/03/opinion-bruno-mars-and-the-issue-of-cultural-appropriation-in-pop-music/

16.  Incorrect: Needless to say, I’m anxious about this fresh start I’m being faced with. But I’m here because I choose to be.

Correct: Needless to say, I’m anxious about this fresh start I’m being faced with, but I’m here because I choose to be.

http://mtsusidelines.com/2017/08/a-new-me-a-freshmans-every-thought-as-the-semester-begins/

17. Incorrect: Technically, I’m a marketing major, but I wouldn’t be lying if I told you I’ve googled “what can I actually do with a marketing degree?” a time or two.

Correct: Technically, I’m a marketing major, but I would be lying if I told you I’ve googled “what can I actually do with a marketing degree?” a time or two.

http://mtsusidelines.com/2017/08/a-new-me-a-freshmans-every-thought-as-the-semester-begins/

18. Incorrect: Based in the 1980s in a small town in Indiana, the show follows the investigation of the disappearance of Joyce Byer’s, played by Winona Ryder, 12-year-old son, Will, acted by Noah Schnapp.

Correct: Based in the 1980s in a small town in Indiana, the show follows the investigation of the disappearance of Joyce Byer’s (Winona Ryder) and 12-year-old son, Will (Noah Schnapp).

http://mtsusidelines.com/2018/04/sidelines-guidelines-escape-end-of-semester-stress-with-our-top-netflix-picks/

19. Incorrect: Whether it’s witnessing the casts’ plentiful pranks on one other or watching Michael Scott, portrayed by Steve Carell, embarrass himself through his questionable actions, this show is perfect to binge-watch after a night full of studying.

Correct: Whether it’s witnessing the casts’ plentiful pranks on one other or watching Michael Scott (Steve Carell) embarrass himself through his questionable actions, this show is perfect to binge-watch after a night full of studying.

http://mtsusidelines.com/2018/04/sidelines-guidelines-escape-end-of-semester-stress-with-our-top-netflix-picks/

20. Incorrect: The series follows the tragic tale of the three Baudelaire orphans who work to investigate their parents’ mysterious deaths.

Correct: The series follows the tragic tale of the three Baudelaire orphans, who work to investigate their parents’ mysterious deaths.

http://mtsusidelines.com/2018/04/sidelines-guidelines-escape-end-of-semester-stress-with-our-top-netflix-picks/

 

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